I honestly don't know where to begin. Bad dialogue, switching from 1st person pov to 3rd person within the span of paragraph & a half, misspellings, you name it. My favorite line - "The rest of him looked slender but somewhat stocky, and I was undoubtedly appreciating the view." Spotting multiple mistakes before you make it 35% of the way into the story.. well.. this novel could've used an editor.. or I dunno .. multiple sets of eyeballs. Or SOMETHING.